Every time a new player appears on the stage of a story, curiosity and speculation rise up, as is true in actual human relationships. In the case of the next part of this narrative, we have an unusual character, indeed. Just as we attempt to unravel new people in our lives, so are we tempted to predict the actions and temperaments of fictional characters. In a reciprocal manner, the actual speech and actions of a new person inform one of his/her actual profile. And so, it goes: back and forth; to and fro – the familiar patterns we may expect mirrored in reverse those components that do not fit the mold. The expected. The unexpected. The familiar. The strange. Comfort mixed with distress. The new character introduced in this segment provides material for all these conflicting aspects.
I
turn slowly in the direction he
stares, stunned, because watching
near the hut skulks
a creature standing
upright who may be
human
although it could just as well have
sprung
uncut from the earth – all hair and dirt –
or
fallen from a tree – full-furred with teeth
The
creature moves towards us. Hart gasps
again
and
my own heart is pounding, but I want
to know who or what
we’re about to meet
I’m
thinking we are safe in the boat but
I will have to pry the oars out of
Hart’s
whitened grip, if the
best course is retreat
The
apparition strides slowly toward us
It
raises a hand and calls out loudly,
“Ho there! What’s your
business?” It’s a woman!
Hart
still can’t or won’t speak and what is true
sounds wrong. I can’t say, a snake lead us here
“What’s
your business!” She is more insistent
“We’re
exploring,” peeps Hart, face all whitened
“Yeah,
we’re just looking around,” I add but
I’m not convinced, so how can she believe?
She’s
at the land-end of the too-short dock
Her
face mud-streaked, her gray-brown hair matted
Hefty
breasts hanging halfway to her waist
inside her rough-hewn,
brown shirt streaked with dirt,
and trousers
hung from a thick leather belt.
“Explorers,
eh?” she cackles rocking back
on
her booted heels, hands on wide, thick hips
“Two
strong young people should be working hard
not
lazing about in a boat like that.”
“Like
what!?” I challenge in the boat’s defense
“Looks
like a Sunday boat for parasols
and ruffles – for a coxcomb and his
girl.”
“She’s
a fine ship!” I frown at her. Hart squeaks.
“Ship!?
Har-de-har-har,” she throws her head back
“Why that tub’ll sink under your
first storm.”
“Want
an apple?” chirps Hart moving past me
with a large red apple held out to
her
“Not
me. What else do you have in that box?”
She
shuffles alongside our boat and squats
on her thick haunches to
inspect the chest
But
Hart scampers back to the storage bin
and sits on it saying, “Just food
and clothes.”
The
way he says it makes it sound like there’s
gold and jewels and money stashed in
the box
“And
a sail,” I add in a haughty tone
as much from pride as my wish to
divert
“You
don’t say,” she answers absently still
craning her neck to assess our small
stores
“So
why are there snakes underneath your
dock?”
I probe in a bid to change her focus
“I
guess they like the dead things under there,”
she pushes her face close to
mine. Her smell
wafts like the lifeless remains she
conjures
“I
just saw some fish parts,” I say, then see
she’s taken this for a question
about
what more frightening corpses lie
underneath?
“Well,
I haven’t drowned any brats lately.”
She leers at me then squints at Hart
and cocks
her head like she’s
sizing him for a kill.
Hart’s small
gulp tells her she has hit her mark
“Where
do all the fish parts come from?” I play
the wounded bird to distract this fat
fox
“I
put them there,” she says with sneering grin
“Why?”
I bait, noticing a welling up
in me of unreasonable confidence
like the flush I feel
when what’s said is true.
I
should be afraid like Hart, but in spite
of present
circumstances, I am not
“To
trap nosey people who look under
my dock!” She bares her teeth and
wriggles her
fingers at me as if planting a hex
“Catch
many?” It’s Hart, somewhat recovered
and slightly more in possession of
voice
This
puts her into a long laughing fit
that jiggles her huge breasts
pushing out her
two walnut nipples
hanging in her shirt
“Let’s
cut the crap,” she stammers between laughs
“I don’t get much company. It was hard
to
resist teasing you a little bit.
She
wipes her nose with her index finger
“How
did you find my place way up this
creek?”
Now
it seems safe to tell the truth. Even
Hart is relaxing and finding his
ground
“We
followed a snake,” I say seriously
She
evaluates my response as true
“That
can get you into trouble they say.”
“That’s
what I said,” Hart pipes up boldly now
“Well,
not this time,” she comforts, “unless you
call a hot meal ‘trouble’ where
you’re both from.
I was just out picking
greens for the soup
We’ll pick
some more and you two can join me.”
“We
just ate before we got here,” Hart lies
and I frown at his blatant
squeamishness
“I’m
hungry,” I say breaking ranks with Hart
“Your
friend can wash the dishes. Come
ashore!”
She stands and turns, beckoning with
a wave
Hart rolls his eyes at
me. I return him
my best cocky
smile as we leave our boat
She
turns and sees Hart’s limp. Her eyebrows
rise
but she looks away and says not a
thing
Hart
breathes, “She hasn’t drowned anybody
but she did not deny eating
someone.”
She
stops dead in her tracks and even though
she is out of earshot, she turns and
says
“I only eat the ones who
are afraid.”
I
want to quip, “Is that why you’re so fat?”
but I think better of it and keep
quiet
We
follow past the brownish broken shack
where dozens of fish are cooking
slowly
tied to long racks,
suspended in light smoke
Beyond
this, a narrow trail breaks the woods
Hart
and I halt side by side as she turns
and heads down the path overhung
with vines
“Come
on,” she says roughly. “We’re getting greens.
I promise not to throw you in the
pot.”
“I’ll
stay here,” Hart volunteers. “Just in
case.”
“Suit
yourself,” I reply and take the path
I catch up to the woman and explain,
“My friend’s a little edgy. He doesn’t
travel much or meet new
people often.”
“He
wouldn’t be the first one I made edgy.
What
town did you say you both come from then?”
“A
place upriver I’d rather forget.”
“Bad
things happen?” she asks over her shoulder
“Yes,
some, but mostly nothing happened much.”
“So,
you two are off to see the world then?”
“Well,
it would be stretching to say ‘the world’
at least in the boat – ‘er ship – we
have now”
“You’ll
be surprised how far that boat will go.”
“You
changed your mind about it then?” I probe
She
stops and turns to face me. “Call it my
little test to see what you have in
here.”
She thumps my chest
quite hard over my heart
then
continues to trudge into the woods
“What
did you find out?” I ask jauntily
Without
stopping, she answers, “Your friend there
stands as true as they come, but
you, well now,
you are a different
kettle of catfish.”
“Catfish?
Is that the kind you were smoking?”
I change to a subject I like better
and she favors me by
taking my tack
“Good
guess. They’re the real source of the
‘dead things’,”
She wriggles her fingers above her
head
like a ghoul clawing up
from underground
“Ah!
Here we are.” She heads off into wild
brushy woods and I scramble to keep
up
Off
the path the light dims quickly. I start
to think I’ve been foolish while
Hart is smart
On
the trail I could outrun her but here
I could trip, fall, and if she sat
on me
I’d be trapped while she
pulled her knife and slashed
me stone
dead – out of nowhere I dream up
Jani’s
three-inch knife – this makes me panic
She
whirls to face me. “Dig here,” she
orders
pointing to a leafy patch of moist
ground
My
eyes grow wide as I picture digging
my own grave for her to stow my body
She
sees my fear and grabs my shoulder hard
“Pods and tubers – that’s all we’re
after here,”
She shakes her head, sighs, lets me
go, kneels down
digging crudely around
the tender plants
I
squat down to watch and learn – some relieved
She
takes the biggest plants out of the ground
she
proves more limber than I would have guessed
where I must concentrate
to do the work
“How
can you be sure these aren’t poisonous?”
“When
you’ve lived in the woods alone like I
have, believe me, you learn poison
from good.”
“That’s
something I would like to learn,” I say
“Well,
this is a patch of wild leeks. The small
ones’ leaves are good for soup. You can pick those,”
she says showing me how with quick, deft moves
“These older bulbs will add chunks
to the soup.
As for poison, not much danger here
but
watch out for the
look-alike Death Camass
that look
like leeks or onions but do not
have
their onion smell. They will kill you sure.”
“That
seems easy,” I say picking the greens
“Don’t
be fooled by your first lesson,” she warns
“Take
storksbill for instance – looks like parsley –
also looks like poison
hemlock – only
pick
storksbill in early spring when you’re sure.”
“Oh,
I see.” I say, my brashness mellowed
Background:
In youth, most of us encounter people who raise our hackles, either in fright or aggression. When a stranger engages us, we experience what psychology calls approach- avoidance behavior. Part of us is curious and wants to know more. Another part brings up fears and intuitions that this is not going to be a pleasant relationship. Of course, in reality, extremely few “strangers” are totally one or the other. Sometimes, a friend accompanies us along the exploration of the new character. If so, that friend likely offers opinions and advice, also based on his/her curiosity and fears. Of course, that’s the case in the above segment, and the dramatic tension rises in segment three next week.
Exploration 1: Do you trust the woman from the hut? What in particular makes you say “yes” or “no”? Can the main character learn from her? If so, about what? Do you think she could be “the one”?
Exploration 2: What is happening between the main character and Hart? For example, where and how do they differ at this point? With whom do you identify more?
Exploration 3: Before and beyond this point in the narrative, there be dragons. Can you identify any at this point? There have been three, and many more to come.
NEXT: “Snakes and Dragons” Segment 3
In youth, most of us encounter people who raise our hackles, either in fright or aggression. When a stranger engages us, we experience what psychology calls approach- avoidance behavior. Part of us is curious and wants to know more. Another part brings up fears and intuitions that this is not going to be a pleasant relationship. Of course, in reality, extremely few “strangers” are totally one or the other. Sometimes, a friend accompanies us along the exploration of the new character. If so, that friend likely offers opinions and advice, also based on his/her curiosity and fears. Of course, that’s the case in the above segment, and the dramatic tension rises in segment three next week.
Exploration 1: Do you trust the woman from the hut? What in particular makes you say “yes” or “no”? Can the main character learn from her? If so, about what? Do you think she could be “the one”?
Exploration 2: What is happening between the main character and Hart? For example, where and how do they differ at this point? With whom do you identify more?
Exploration 3: Before and beyond this point in the narrative, there be dragons. Can you identify any at this point? There have been three, and many more to come.
NEXT: “Snakes and Dragons” Segment 3
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I love the old hag. How thrillingly spooky! Is she the bad guy? The good guy? A little bit of both? Love it!
ReplyDeleteAnd so interesting how Hart's confidence has deflated once faced with a real adventure.
DeleteKim, as always, I appreciate hearing your reactions, esp. now that the narrative is picking up steam. You are the fiction expert, and I bow to your opinions. You may not like the "old hag" as things progress. (Spoiler alert.) And yes, I personally agree with your take on Hart; however, he is the safety valve in this venture. Wait a bit and see what you think. JP Savage
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ReplyDeleteThe old hag and the snake are one, n’est-ce pas? Transmigration day. She is not to be trusted. The MC (main character is Eve. Adam is back by the boat, “I don’t like apples, but anything to keep Honey happy). MC will learn much to his/her regret. If the hag is the One, I’m going home.
I can identify with both Hart and MC, with bias toward MC while looking back to Hart on my DEW line.
Three dragons! The teacher, Jani, and the old hag is my guess.
Hmmm . . . you are all questions on this installment, eh? But wait. First, I have to apologize for responding to your comment so late - frankly, somehow it never appeared in my email. Guess I need to check spam more often.
DeleteBack to the our story . . . Re: the hag and the snake -- the snake is her minion and one of the dragons. Think of the dragons (to be 9 in total) as far more reptilian than human). The other two dragons are the blue dragonfly in an early Song, and the snapping turtle with its lessons in natural laws. Back to the hag/snake, your mistrust is well-placed; however, minions only do what they are told, while their masters always have an agenda.
The hag is MOST DEFINITELY NOT the One. Sheesh!
Re: identification with both MC and Hart, thanks. My intention so far has been to present in gray vs. black and white.
As always, you have my gratitude for reading and commenting. CS